Email Revision

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Good afternoon everyone! I am back at it again with the weekly posting for the blog. In today’s blog, I will be revising an email that I sent to a previous professor that I’ve had. The point of this, is because I was reading a book called A World Without Whom by Emmy Favilla and I read in chapter 11 about emails and how they are hard to come up and how sometimes emails may come off in a different way than what you would’ve hoped for. So after reading that chapter, I will try to edit this old email and see if I can use some of what was said in the chapter in the book. The picture that I am sharing to you guys on this blog is about how I messed up on an essay by turning in the wrong copy of the essay. This email took me about 3 minutes to make because I was in a state of panic because my grade dropped a lot when the wrong copy of the essay was graded. I started off friendly in the email I would say, greeting my professor with, “Hello Professor Naihe!” I then stated that I was one of her students and went straight into the point on why I was emailing her. Looking back on this email, when I wrote, “Here’s the problem” it looks like my old professor was the one that messed up and not me, at least that is how I see it. Sure I explain that I messed up and submitted the wrong copy, but that small sentence appeared that I was implying that it was her fault. I would add on to that small sentence by adding, “Here’s the problem, I messed up.” Something along those lines, rather than just saying “Here’s the problem.” I think I could’ve been more professional in this email, like I should’ve typed computer, instead of “pc.” Like I said, I wrote this email in 3 minutes because I saw what my grade was and I panicked. I ended the email with a thank you and added my name on the bottom of the email (like a pro). Other than that, the email doesn’t look too bad I would say, being under a state of shock after seeing an A go down to a C or D (I can’t remember how long it went). Thankfully, she was super ok with me resubmitting the essay, so the email didn’t come off rude, because if it did, I feel like she would’ve said “no”.